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Nov 29, 2011 | #1
So, I'm sure everyone who is a regular member at this site has some form of opinion on the bestessays brand. You scroll through some of the comments people have made, and you get a few snippets of dialogue:
"Expensive"
"Spelling Errors"
"Late"
"UKRANIAN FRAUDS/MURDERERS/RAPISTS"
Crime, crime, crime, crime, crime. You'd think with such a colorful picture of bestessays, one would take their opinion and steer clear of their services.
Well, I'm what they call "insane" in some circles. I have spent the past year making up assignments for the bestessay team to do to get my own opinion on the matter. Because I have a ton of money and nothing better to do with my life apparently. Anyway, let's get straight to biscuits.
~Assignment 1~
-11/20/2010-
~Urgency: 10 days~
-Platinum Quality-
~Ten Pages~
-Additional VIP Service Package-
~$342~
The paper was to be a case study of a military member who was kicked out of the service for Adjustment Disorder but was found later by the VA to be suffering from Major Depression and Anxiety. The essay additionally requested that, using evidence, prove that the military member was wrongfully discharged.
One day after starting the order, I get a message from customer service:
Customer Service:Since this is a very important assignment I recommend you choose our Top 10 writers for an additional amount of $81.00 . This would make them prioritize this order compared to others we are receiving today. Would you like to take advantage of this service?
Me: I have already selected the Platinum Package which includes top 20 writers AND the VIP package which includes top 10 writers. This is the third time I have been offered this option when I alreadyy selected it when I made the order! I expect top 10 quality writing with my product requested, and am deeply concerned that it hasn't been expedited yet! Why have I not been assigned a writer?!
One hour later...
CS: Please disregard the message sent to you.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Wut.
That's pretty freaking funny. Anyway, four days later I finally get assigned a writer. I decide to say hello.
Me: Hi there! Do you need any additional information regarding my order? Also, I was curious to know what type of degree you hold, in what field.
Five hours later...
Writer: Hi!
Thank you for the message. I would truly appreciate it if you send the instructions in a word file since the it appears to be not that organized. It is important that I am able to perceive all necessary details of the scenario in order to get enough basis to say that the disorder is Major Depression with Anxiety. Please rest assured that all psychological concepts applied will be seen in your paper.
Seems like a fairly nice guy, seems to understand the concept of the paper. A couple of spelling errors, but hey! Stephen King has HORRIBLE grammar, and look at him!
Me: I have uploaded the instructions in, hopefully, a clearer format and updated them as of 11/15/2010. I have included in those instructions a very rough draft that I had shown my instructor when he asked how we were coming along with our papers.
Wr: Hello!
Thank you for providing the details to your instructions. I will get in touch in case of concerns regarding your paper.
Cool. The next day, I change up the order.
Me: Minor change to my order. The title would more accurately be "Trouble Troop or Troubled Troop: The Case of Soldier X". It isn't about differentiation between the two mental disorders, but more accurately prooving his misconduct was the result of "either, or" mental disorder.
Two days later...
CS: Our writers ask you to increase the number of pages for your assignment for +1.
If you agree please hit "Agree" button and you will be forwarded to the payment form to proceed with the additional payment. If you refuse please hit "Deny" and your order will be processed at the original price and number of pages.
Aw man, that really nice guy is on a roll! Sure buddy, keep on cranking that keyboard! I accept. I get charged an additional 30 some odd bucks. Two hours after agreeing to the upgrade, the writer tells me that the assignment is completed and waiting to be proofread. Shortly after, I get the paper back. It's pretty rough Here are a few excerpts:
Page 1: "He was considered as a highly performing military personnel because of his achievements and was praised by commanding officers because of his military bearing."
Fuhhhh....holy crap.
Page 2: "A VA medical report showed that Soldier X reported that his base was regularly mortared. Rockets were oftentimes fired from a nearby highway. Despite of the hostile environment, he reported that he did not experience any feeling of significant threat. However, when he returned to the US, he experienced difficulties in adjusting. He then encountered trouble in sleeping as he often struggled with insomnia and hypersomnia. This lack of sleep and oversleeping caused him to not be able to work on time. Because of this, he was reprimanded by his superiors. Soldier X consulted a physician, who prescribed him with Zolpidem (Ambien) at 10mg."
-next paragraph-
"Soldier X continued to commit mistakes in his work, which negatively affected his relationship with his commanding officer. He experienced difficulties in coping with his paperwork. He also showed lack of energy and motivation. Aside from physical symptoms, Soldier X also felt a high degree of loneliness for a great period of time. He also experienced being upset, with episodes of crying. He also indulged in self-blame and became overly fixated on not coming late for work. Anxiety was also a significant symptom he was experiencing out of fear of making more mistakes."
This is Top 10, Platinum, VIP quality writing? Of course, who am I to judge. I suck at writing too. I should get a job with these guys.
Page 6: "Depression is a common issue in the military. Personnel, especially those who are deployed in war-stricken areas, are at high risk of acquiring depression."
Page 7: "Depression is a common condition in the military especially to personnel who are deployed in war zones such as Iraq and Afghanistan."
Come on, really?! How did this pass editing?! Hahahaha. Needless to say, I quickly requested a revision of the paper.
WR: Hello!
I am very sorry for not exactly writing as what you intended to. I do have a suggestion though. I could explain in the paper that most of the symptoms Soldier X experienced is of major depressive disorder based on DSM IV. I will then make an Appendix consisting of all the misconducts and mistakes he committed, then identifying them as either AD or MDD in a tabular form. I am very sorry about this. I am experiencing a bulk of orders right now that is why I cannot accommodate if I have to rewrite the whole evaluation. I hope my suggestion can fix this.
He's so polite, how can I be mad at him? Even though he's saying he cannot rewrite the paper because he has too many orders. I feel so bad for my good guy writer! Poor guy is getting whipped by his superiors to work on more papers! Wa...wait a minute...
From the FAQ page of bestessays:
Q.How can I be sure that you have a specialized writer to work on my order?
A....Our employees work in the mode of selection - they choose the orders to work on themselves and we approve the best suitable writer from those who are interested to work on it. This way we can guarantee that your order is taken by a writer who is not only willing to work on your order, but is also proficient enough in your subject area.
Oh, so that dumb netted himself too many orders. DURP. I respond.
Me: Just go ahead and make the appendix and I will fill in the necessary details. :) thanks for everything!
Final paper just had a appendix copy/pasted to the back of the assignment. I decided to check the 'editing time' via Properties/Details.
The first draft had not been edited at all.
The second draft had been edited for a total of 7 minutes.
Seven minutes for a 12 page paper? That's almost two pages a minute. How do you read and edit two pages in one minute? Crazy.
But I should say that it's not absolute trash. The research was done and is applied well in some parts:
"While Soldier X was still in service, he already reported the changes in his behaviour. These changes include insomnia, irritability, hypersensitivity and anxiety. In turn, he was given 3 types of drugs to eliminate the symptoms. What is suspicious about this is that on the third time, Soldier X was already given Citalopram and Paroxetine, which are used to treat symptoms of major depression disorders. If the report on AD is used as a basis, these symptoms were not included in the diagnostic report. Even without Soldier X reporting depressive symptoms, drugs should not be prescribed so easily for cases of AD (Carta, Balestrieri, and Murru)."
Final Thoughts on Assignment 1 - In all honesty, the paper appears to be salvageable by a person with an astute mind and a little knowledge on the topic. The discussions I had with the writer were very polite and cordial. The assignment was also completed two days before the deadline, so those who want to get more involved in their assignment could point out the errors that were in the paper to have them fixed in the allotted time-frame. That begs the question though: Why should the customer be telling the team at bestessay how to do their job?
There is a serious issue when your top of the line product, which promises top of the line writing and editing with VIP service, comes across as sloppily done. Who does that reflect on? The top ten writer shouldn't be stumbling through sentence structure; A trained editor should be picking up on those errors; Customer service should of checked that I had already purchased the top ten package (twice fold) before trying to get me to buy it again for a third time.
I honestly did not feel like a VIP with the product that I received.
TL;DR Paper was salvageable but not what I call Platinum VIP quality. But my writer was a nice guy. Customer service is too busy trying to get more of your money without checking to see what you've already paid for, making them look like clowns. Paper came early, even though it was rife with problems.
But that wouldn't be the last time I use Bestessays...
Didn't I say I was insane? A normal person would of said "This experiment of throwing money away seems really stupid." But I am not a normal person. So I threw more money at bestessay. For Science!
~Assignment 2~
-04/03/2011-
~Urgency: 24 hours~
-Platinum Quality-
~Two Pages~
-No VIP support-
~$98~
The assignment was to answer a few questions in short essay format. I wanted to emulate a kid trying to get his homework assignment done for him in a short period of time, so he can spend the weekend playing MW3 and calling grown men "gay" over Xbox Live instead of reading books that would expand his vernacular past belittling people by accusing them of homosexuality.
1.)Several selections explore the theme of innocence and experience (The House on Mango Street, Young Goodman Brown, Araby, and Good Country People). Discuss how this theme is explored in any three of these selections. What have the characters learned about life? What have they learned about themselves?
2.)We have explored selections that depict the condition and treatment of the American worker (Death of a Salesman, Bartleby the Scrivener, Glengarry Glen Ross). Compare and contrast how any two of these works deal with this idea. What, if anything, are these works saying about the corporate world, The American Dream, and/or the idea of success and happiness in America?
3.)Pick any one of the following three works: Hunger Artist, The Lottery, or The Ones Who Walk Away from Omelas. Then apply it to our 21st century world. What can we learn from this work? Are the themes still relevant? Why or why not? Feel free to consider things such as religion, economics, culture, etc.
The assignment was ordered at 9:20pm on April 2nd, and was completed at 10:39am the next day. Not bad! Checking details through preferences showed that the writer spent 2 hours on the assignment. Another speedy delivery...but I bet the content is going to blow again.
1." "Araby," "Good Country People," and "Young Goodman Brown" all explore the theme of innocence and experience, journeys that result in a greater understanding of the world around them. This causes the characters to come away with the sense that the world is a negative place full of danger and disappointment. For example, the hopeful boy in "Araby" believes that going to the bazaar will change his life for the better. His love for the girl overwhelms the mundane aspects of his day-to-day life, which now seems to him "child's play, ugly monotonous child's play" ("Araby"). However, the bazaar is not what he expected and he walks away empty-handed, teaching him that he is not as grown up as he thought he was, and that the bazaar did not truly represent an opportunity for serious change. Joy, the one-legged daughter in "Good Country People" experiences a similar kind of disappointment when she climbs into the hayloft with the Bible salesman. Her journey from innocence to experience takes the form of showing the Bible salesman how her false leg is removed. This is an act more intimate than any physical couplings they may engage in, and "it was like surrendering to him completely" ("Good Country People"). Like the boy in "Araby," the story ends with Joy's total disappointment after the Bible salesman steals her leg. Her journey from innocence to experience demonstrates that she had been right to hold herself back from other people. The title character of "Young Goodman Brown" is similarly disappointed when a nighttime journey (or possible dream) shows him that everyone in his community, including his wife, is in league with the Devil. On learning that his wife has been corrupted, he says, "There is no good on earth; and sin is but a name. Come, devil; for to thee is this world given." ("Young Goodman Brown"). He begins the story entirely innocent to the evil that exists around him and ends the story devastated by having become far too aware of what human beings are capable of. "
...What the hell man?! That's actually REALLY GOOD! I mean, from my perspective - I'm sure there exists the possibility that a sentence or two is incorrectly formatted...but it reads well! It's informative! It's got a nice ending! That's actually a really good response! Kudos, writer. Kudos.
Some further excerpts:
"The plays illustrate that 'The American Dream' is an unobtainable myth, and that success and happiness in America is all too often dependent on the false illusion that a person is best defined by their job."
" "The Lottery" by Shirley Jackson is still very relevant to today's modern world. This is due, in part, to the story's commentary on the evil that exists within the individual, and how that evil can be magnified by a group with common interests and purpose."
"Although the town's lottery system results in death, it is an important part of their community, and a way for the town to thrive. Indeed, Jackson mentions that some other towns had given up the lottery system with negative consequences. Modern life seems to value the individual over the community, and "The Lottery" can serve as a reminder that a sense of community, a past, and a purpose are ways in which people can feel connected to others."
Eh, not so sure about that last one (twisting facts to fit theories, Sherlock Holmes would be most displeased) but these are pretty spectacular short answers. He did very well for such a short time frame.
Final Thoughts on Assignment 2 - I'm shocked. I don't pay for VIP service, and I get VIP quality writing and speed. Of course, it could be argued that the subject matter is a little easier than the first assignment, but still.
TL;DR - I paid for less services and got a quality product in half the allotted time.
Oh, but i'm not done.
~Assignment 3~
-05/06/2011-
~Urgency: 10 days~
-Platinum Quality-
~Two Pages~
-No VIP support-
~$54~
Creative writing time!
Me:Need a character history for the D&D 4th Edition Dark Sun Campaign based on this character. Explain the reasoning behind everything on the character sheet please, such as skills, feats, abilities, items, etc. as well as back story.
I included a few character sheets from a D&D character creator I finagled around with, which had stat points, gear, and skills. Basically, all I was asking was for a creative writing writer to invent some back story for a board game. Not too hard. All you need is imagination. The subject was creative writing, so I'm sure those creative writers will be able to come up with something sweet. Also, they have ten days to brainstorm! $50 bucks to make up a D&D character? That's a pretty sweet deal.
Order was placed on April 26th, finished May 1st. Not bad, four days of work. Wish he had brain stormed a little longer.
"Drugr is a good male dragonborn knight from the land of Athas. He is knight who has a good heart for helping others in need. He has a high stature, with green as the hue of his skin, and the looks of a humanoid dragon. Although he looks ferocious, creatures and people around him can easily know that he is of the lawful good character alignment. "
Oh god. Oh god this is painful to read.
"He was raised by human clerics who cared for him as their own child. Drugr is a mystery, he was found by a band of clerics on the road to Tyr. He was a dragonborn out of nowhere who had a pentagonal shaped birthmark on his palm."
SKYRIMPOTTER. WINGARDIUMFOOSROHDAH. I've seriously read better **** on fanfic.net.
"Although, while on a trip to the astral planes of Athas to experiment new spells and magic, the human clerics were accidentally lost in the Gray. They conjured their magic to contact Drugr and try to convey their final words to him. He was 14 years old then."
Wait, no, this has to have been written by a 13 year old girl from GaiaOnline. This is treacherous. The only thing it's missing is some Lieutenant Mary Sue.
"After that incident, Drugr promised that he will never forget the lessons that his teachers taught to him. He inherited the will of his teachers and continued on his journey to make it happen. He was raised to be good warrior with good morals and values. Since Drugr is different from the humans who raised him, he acquired the skills of a good warrior who fights with strength and muscle than a cleric who fights by conjuring elemental magic. He was a secret apprentice of Neeva who taught him when he was little. He secretly trained awhile with him on a secret location in the slums of Tyr. Drugr idolized Neeva and made a promise to the whole universe that one day, he will surpass his master. That was why he was very enthusiastic about training and used his powers to defend what was dear to him. He was never introduced to Rkard, Neeva's son, to avoid jealousy."
There's your Mary Sue. Wow. The Top Ten Creative Writing
Litterateur just pulled a Mary Sue. He's like a freaking Dragon Goku with a pinch of Harry Potter.
"He walks forward carrying his dreams and hopes for a better future. He journeys for his destiny, his fate, and to answer what lies beyond the mystery of his scar. His quest to end the madness of his world starts."
Oh, does it now? Did you really have to say that his "quest to end the madness of his world" is starting? Man, no wonder you're writing papers for lazy college students: You have the imagination of a 98 year old triple stroke victim. Now burn that manuscript and get a job at Panera Bread, because your prospects in fiction are about as bright as my *******.
Final Thoughts on Assignment 3 - Do not buy $50 worth of creative writing for your Dungeons and Dragons character. If you do, you are a giant dumbass.
TL;DR- I am a giant dumbass.
Wow, i'm still doing these? Really, what IS wrong with me?
~Assignment 4~
-5/23/2011-
~Urgency: 5 days~
-Premium Quality-
~Three Pages~
-No VIP Support-
~$81~
Here I play the part of the overburdened college student, writing some essay that he just can't finish because of all the other coursework he has to do. So, we send an incomplete essay to the guys at bestessay to see if they can put the final touches to this unfinished essay.
Me:I already started writing the paper but I have a ton of stuff I need to do for finals so I need to finish up on the paper. I'm basically going for a "what if" scenario had Japan captured the Hawaiin Islands following Pearl Harbor during World War 2, if they would invade America, and if it would have an effect on the US Military intervention in the European theater, and the potential final outcome of the war. A fantasy scenario, if you will. Please begin at the asterix near the end of the essay.
Assignment was ordered May 18th, and was completed May 19th. That's fast!
Page 8:"When economy suffered the damages of Great Depression, attention of the US government was concentrated on reviving the economy."
Oh boy, here we go!
"Act of aggression on the Americans was condemned by the citizens, the Congress and the Senate who supported declaration of war against Japan. Unrestricted use of submarines came in handy to rescue American forces at a time when even her economic power was still on its knees."
That doesn't make sense. Those are two totally different thoughts.
"If Japanese succeeded in what they had planned to deal a killer to the Americans then US power and influence both politically and economically in the world arena would be greatly jeopardized. Japanese wanted raw materials for their industries and they had already conquered West Indies, Southwest Asia and China and wished to expand the territory (Aldrich, 2000, 222). "
This is seriously embarrassing. How does someone get a job as a professional writer when they write like that? Again, two different thoughts.
"With Americans having suffered enough during the Great Depression, the attack on Pearl Harbor triggered rage against the Japanese. The war in Europe was still ongoing but Americans remained neutral. This aggression by the Japanese tested the patience of the Americans who now vowed to protect the sovereignty rather than abandoning the government. If the Japanese plan succeeded, the people of US would have turned against the government decrying increasing hardships and they could have forced Franklin Roosevelt out of office the same way they had pushed out his predecessor Herbert Hoover."
Did this guy write an essay and then just scrambled it all up? We're going all over the place here. The thoughts are all there, but they are all out of order.
"After the attack of Pearl Harbor, all the focus of technological advancement was aimed at making an atomic bomb besides other military warfare."
So....not all, since you mentioned "other military warfare."
"After the Japan incursion on American Pearl Harbor the focus of WWII would have shifted to that front of the war. Hawaii held the highest number of US fleets and troops. The Japanese had little problem in identifying their target. The central aim Admiral Yamamoto Isoroku was to demoralize the Americans and turn the people against their government (Holwitt, 2008, 33). It was a surprise attack that was aimed at going further than destruction of the Pearl Harbor but it was the military rebound that saved the Americans from humiliation in the hands of Japanese."
Started going in the direction that I wanted you to go, about the hypothetical idea of Japan controlling the Hawaiin islands, but then you go back to a Pearl Harbor history lesson. This isn't an essay about Pearl Harbor.
"If the Japanese succeeded in capturing Hawaii Island then the shape of WWII would have definitely changed and may be could have altered the political dynamics as they are today."
That's the concluding paragraph.
Final Thoughts on Assignment 4- Bestessay writers are beginning to prove to me that they aren't very good at thinking outside of the box and not very good at imagination. I think we've established that you are more likely than not getting a bad writer with bestessays.
TL;DR-- I'm 6 dollars shy of spending $500 on a bunch of illiterate babble. I wonder what I could of bought with that $500...
"Expensive"
"Spelling Errors"
"Late"
"UKRANIAN FRAUDS/MURDERERS/RAPISTS"
Crime, crime, crime, crime, crime. You'd think with such a colorful picture of bestessays, one would take their opinion and steer clear of their services.
Well, I'm what they call "insane" in some circles. I have spent the past year making up assignments for the bestessay team to do to get my own opinion on the matter. Because I have a ton of money and nothing better to do with my life apparently. Anyway, let's get straight to biscuits.
~Assignment 1~
-11/20/2010-
~Urgency: 10 days~
-Platinum Quality-
~Ten Pages~
-Additional VIP Service Package-
~$342~
The paper was to be a case study of a military member who was kicked out of the service for Adjustment Disorder but was found later by the VA to be suffering from Major Depression and Anxiety. The essay additionally requested that, using evidence, prove that the military member was wrongfully discharged.
One day after starting the order, I get a message from customer service:
Customer Service:Since this is a very important assignment I recommend you choose our Top 10 writers for an additional amount of $81.00 . This would make them prioritize this order compared to others we are receiving today. Would you like to take advantage of this service?
Me: I have already selected the Platinum Package which includes top 20 writers AND the VIP package which includes top 10 writers. This is the third time I have been offered this option when I alreadyy selected it when I made the order! I expect top 10 quality writing with my product requested, and am deeply concerned that it hasn't been expedited yet! Why have I not been assigned a writer?!
One hour later...
CS: Please disregard the message sent to you.
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!
Wut.
That's pretty freaking funny. Anyway, four days later I finally get assigned a writer. I decide to say hello.
Me: Hi there! Do you need any additional information regarding my order? Also, I was curious to know what type of degree you hold, in what field.
Five hours later...
Writer: Hi!
Thank you for the message. I would truly appreciate it if you send the instructions in a word file since the it appears to be not that organized. It is important that I am able to perceive all necessary details of the scenario in order to get enough basis to say that the disorder is Major Depression with Anxiety. Please rest assured that all psychological concepts applied will be seen in your paper.
Seems like a fairly nice guy, seems to understand the concept of the paper. A couple of spelling errors, but hey! Stephen King has HORRIBLE grammar, and look at him!
Me: I have uploaded the instructions in, hopefully, a clearer format and updated them as of 11/15/2010. I have included in those instructions a very rough draft that I had shown my instructor when he asked how we were coming along with our papers.
Wr: Hello!
Thank you for providing the details to your instructions. I will get in touch in case of concerns regarding your paper.
Cool. The next day, I change up the order.
Me: Minor change to my order. The title would more accurately be "Trouble Troop or Troubled Troop: The Case of Soldier X". It isn't about differentiation between the two mental disorders, but more accurately prooving his misconduct was the result of "either, or" mental disorder.
Two days later...
CS: Our writers ask you to increase the number of pages for your assignment for +1.
If you agree please hit "Agree" button and you will be forwarded to the payment form to proceed with the additional payment. If you refuse please hit "Deny" and your order will be processed at the original price and number of pages.
Aw man, that really nice guy is on a roll! Sure buddy, keep on cranking that keyboard! I accept. I get charged an additional 30 some odd bucks. Two hours after agreeing to the upgrade, the writer tells me that the assignment is completed and waiting to be proofread. Shortly after, I get the paper back. It's pretty rough Here are a few excerpts:
Page 1: "He was considered as a highly performing military personnel because of his achievements and was praised by commanding officers because of his military bearing."
Fuhhhh....holy crap.
Page 2: "A VA medical report showed that Soldier X reported that his base was regularly mortared. Rockets were oftentimes fired from a nearby highway. Despite of the hostile environment, he reported that he did not experience any feeling of significant threat. However, when he returned to the US, he experienced difficulties in adjusting. He then encountered trouble in sleeping as he often struggled with insomnia and hypersomnia. This lack of sleep and oversleeping caused him to not be able to work on time. Because of this, he was reprimanded by his superiors. Soldier X consulted a physician, who prescribed him with Zolpidem (Ambien) at 10mg."
-next paragraph-
"Soldier X continued to commit mistakes in his work, which negatively affected his relationship with his commanding officer. He experienced difficulties in coping with his paperwork. He also showed lack of energy and motivation. Aside from physical symptoms, Soldier X also felt a high degree of loneliness for a great period of time. He also experienced being upset, with episodes of crying. He also indulged in self-blame and became overly fixated on not coming late for work. Anxiety was also a significant symptom he was experiencing out of fear of making more mistakes."
This is Top 10, Platinum, VIP quality writing? Of course, who am I to judge. I suck at writing too. I should get a job with these guys.
Page 6: "Depression is a common issue in the military. Personnel, especially those who are deployed in war-stricken areas, are at high risk of acquiring depression."
Page 7: "Depression is a common condition in the military especially to personnel who are deployed in war zones such as Iraq and Afghanistan."
Come on, really?! How did this pass editing?! Hahahaha. Needless to say, I quickly requested a revision of the paper.
WR: Hello!
I am very sorry for not exactly writing as what you intended to. I do have a suggestion though. I could explain in the paper that most of the symptoms Soldier X experienced is of major depressive disorder based on DSM IV. I will then make an Appendix consisting of all the misconducts and mistakes he committed, then identifying them as either AD or MDD in a tabular form. I am very sorry about this. I am experiencing a bulk of orders right now that is why I cannot accommodate if I have to rewrite the whole evaluation. I hope my suggestion can fix this.He's so polite, how can I be mad at him? Even though he's saying he cannot rewrite the paper because he has too many orders. I feel so bad for my good guy writer! Poor guy is getting whipped by his superiors to work on more papers! Wa...wait a minute...
From the FAQ page of bestessays:
Q.How can I be sure that you have a specialized writer to work on my order?
A....Our employees work in the mode of selection - they choose the orders to work on themselves and we approve the best suitable writer from those who are interested to work on it. This way we can guarantee that your order is taken by a writer who is not only willing to work on your order, but is also proficient enough in your subject area.
Oh, so that dumb netted himself too many orders. DURP. I respond.
Me: Just go ahead and make the appendix and I will fill in the necessary details. :) thanks for everything!
Final paper just had a appendix copy/pasted to the back of the assignment. I decided to check the 'editing time' via Properties/Details.
The first draft had not been edited at all.
The second draft had been edited for a total of 7 minutes.
Seven minutes for a 12 page paper? That's almost two pages a minute. How do you read and edit two pages in one minute? Crazy.
But I should say that it's not absolute trash. The research was done and is applied well in some parts:
"While Soldier X was still in service, he already reported the changes in his behaviour. These changes include insomnia, irritability, hypersensitivity and anxiety. In turn, he was given 3 types of drugs to eliminate the symptoms. What is suspicious about this is that on the third time, Soldier X was already given Citalopram and Paroxetine, which are used to treat symptoms of major depression disorders. If the report on AD is used as a basis, these symptoms were not included in the diagnostic report. Even without Soldier X reporting depressive symptoms, drugs should not be prescribed so easily for cases of AD (Carta, Balestrieri, and Murru)."
Final Thoughts on Assignment 1 - In all honesty, the paper appears to be salvageable by a person with an astute mind and a little knowledge on the topic. The discussions I had with the writer were very polite and cordial. The assignment was also completed two days before the deadline, so those who want to get more involved in their assignment could point out the errors that were in the paper to have them fixed in the allotted time-frame. That begs the question though: Why should the customer be telling the team at bestessay how to do their job?
There is a serious issue when your top of the line product, which promises top of the line writing and editing with VIP service, comes across as sloppily done. Who does that reflect on? The top ten writer shouldn't be stumbling through sentence structure; A trained editor should be picking up on those errors; Customer service should of checked that I had already purchased the top ten package (twice fold) before trying to get me to buy it again for a third time.
I honestly did not feel like a VIP with the product that I received.
TL;DR Paper was salvageable but not what I call Platinum VIP quality. But my writer was a nice guy. Customer service is too busy trying to get more of your money without checking to see what you've already paid for, making them look like clowns. Paper came early, even though it was rife with problems.
But that wouldn't be the last time I use Bestessays...
Didn't I say I was insane? A normal person would of said "This experiment of throwing money away seems really stupid." But I am not a normal person. So I threw more money at bestessay. For Science!
~Assignment 2~
-04/03/2011-
~Urgency: 24 hours~
-Platinum Quality-
~Two Pages~
-No VIP support-
~$98~
The assignment was to answer a few questions in short essay format. I wanted to emulate a kid trying to get his homework assignment done for him in a short period of time, so he can spend the weekend playing MW3 and calling grown men "gay" over Xbox Live instead of reading books that would expand his vernacular past belittling people by accusing them of homosexuality.
1.)Several selections explore the theme of innocence and experience (The House on Mango Street, Young Goodman Brown, Araby, and Good Country People). Discuss how this theme is explored in any three of these selections. What have the characters learned about life? What have they learned about themselves?
2.)We have explored selections that depict the condition and treatment of the American worker (Death of a Salesman, Bartleby the Scrivener, Glengarry Glen Ross). Compare and contrast how any two of these works deal with this idea. What, if anything, are these works saying about the corporate world, The American Dream, and/or the idea of success and happiness in America?
3.)Pick any one of the following three works: Hunger Artist, The Lottery, or The Ones Who Walk Away from Omelas. Then apply it to our 21st century world. What can we learn from this work? Are the themes still relevant? Why or why not? Feel free to consider things such as religion, economics, culture, etc.
The assignment was ordered at 9:20pm on April 2nd, and was completed at 10:39am the next day. Not bad! Checking details through preferences showed that the writer spent 2 hours on the assignment. Another speedy delivery...but I bet the content is going to blow again.
1." "Araby," "Good Country People," and "Young Goodman Brown" all explore the theme of innocence and experience, journeys that result in a greater understanding of the world around them. This causes the characters to come away with the sense that the world is a negative place full of danger and disappointment. For example, the hopeful boy in "Araby" believes that going to the bazaar will change his life for the better. His love for the girl overwhelms the mundane aspects of his day-to-day life, which now seems to him "child's play, ugly monotonous child's play" ("Araby"). However, the bazaar is not what he expected and he walks away empty-handed, teaching him that he is not as grown up as he thought he was, and that the bazaar did not truly represent an opportunity for serious change. Joy, the one-legged daughter in "Good Country People" experiences a similar kind of disappointment when she climbs into the hayloft with the Bible salesman. Her journey from innocence to experience takes the form of showing the Bible salesman how her false leg is removed. This is an act more intimate than any physical couplings they may engage in, and "it was like surrendering to him completely" ("Good Country People"). Like the boy in "Araby," the story ends with Joy's total disappointment after the Bible salesman steals her leg. Her journey from innocence to experience demonstrates that she had been right to hold herself back from other people. The title character of "Young Goodman Brown" is similarly disappointed when a nighttime journey (or possible dream) shows him that everyone in his community, including his wife, is in league with the Devil. On learning that his wife has been corrupted, he says, "There is no good on earth; and sin is but a name. Come, devil; for to thee is this world given." ("Young Goodman Brown"). He begins the story entirely innocent to the evil that exists around him and ends the story devastated by having become far too aware of what human beings are capable of. "
...What the hell man?! That's actually REALLY GOOD! I mean, from my perspective - I'm sure there exists the possibility that a sentence or two is incorrectly formatted...but it reads well! It's informative! It's got a nice ending! That's actually a really good response! Kudos, writer. Kudos.
Some further excerpts:
"The plays illustrate that 'The American Dream' is an unobtainable myth, and that success and happiness in America is all too often dependent on the false illusion that a person is best defined by their job."
" "The Lottery" by Shirley Jackson is still very relevant to today's modern world. This is due, in part, to the story's commentary on the evil that exists within the individual, and how that evil can be magnified by a group with common interests and purpose."
"Although the town's lottery system results in death, it is an important part of their community, and a way for the town to thrive. Indeed, Jackson mentions that some other towns had given up the lottery system with negative consequences. Modern life seems to value the individual over the community, and "The Lottery" can serve as a reminder that a sense of community, a past, and a purpose are ways in which people can feel connected to others."
Eh, not so sure about that last one (twisting facts to fit theories, Sherlock Holmes would be most displeased) but these are pretty spectacular short answers. He did very well for such a short time frame.
Final Thoughts on Assignment 2 - I'm shocked. I don't pay for VIP service, and I get VIP quality writing and speed. Of course, it could be argued that the subject matter is a little easier than the first assignment, but still.
TL;DR - I paid for less services and got a quality product in half the allotted time.
Oh, but i'm not done.
~Assignment 3~
-05/06/2011-
~Urgency: 10 days~
-Platinum Quality-
~Two Pages~
-No VIP support-
~$54~
Creative writing time!
Me:Need a character history for the D&D 4th Edition Dark Sun Campaign based on this character. Explain the reasoning behind everything on the character sheet please, such as skills, feats, abilities, items, etc. as well as back story.
I included a few character sheets from a D&D character creator I finagled around with, which had stat points, gear, and skills. Basically, all I was asking was for a creative writing writer to invent some back story for a board game. Not too hard. All you need is imagination. The subject was creative writing, so I'm sure those creative writers will be able to come up with something sweet. Also, they have ten days to brainstorm! $50 bucks to make up a D&D character? That's a pretty sweet deal.
Order was placed on April 26th, finished May 1st. Not bad, four days of work. Wish he had brain stormed a little longer.
"Drugr is a good male dragonborn knight from the land of Athas. He is knight who has a good heart for helping others in need. He has a high stature, with green as the hue of his skin, and the looks of a humanoid dragon. Although he looks ferocious, creatures and people around him can easily know that he is of the lawful good character alignment. "
Oh god. Oh god this is painful to read.
"He was raised by human clerics who cared for him as their own child. Drugr is a mystery, he was found by a band of clerics on the road to Tyr. He was a dragonborn out of nowhere who had a pentagonal shaped birthmark on his palm."
SKYRIMPOTTER. WINGARDIUMFOOSROHDAH. I've seriously read better **** on fanfic.net.
"Although, while on a trip to the astral planes of Athas to experiment new spells and magic, the human clerics were accidentally lost in the Gray. They conjured their magic to contact Drugr and try to convey their final words to him. He was 14 years old then."
Wait, no, this has to have been written by a 13 year old girl from GaiaOnline. This is treacherous. The only thing it's missing is some Lieutenant Mary Sue.
"After that incident, Drugr promised that he will never forget the lessons that his teachers taught to him. He inherited the will of his teachers and continued on his journey to make it happen. He was raised to be good warrior with good morals and values. Since Drugr is different from the humans who raised him, he acquired the skills of a good warrior who fights with strength and muscle than a cleric who fights by conjuring elemental magic. He was a secret apprentice of Neeva who taught him when he was little. He secretly trained awhile with him on a secret location in the slums of Tyr. Drugr idolized Neeva and made a promise to the whole universe that one day, he will surpass his master. That was why he was very enthusiastic about training and used his powers to defend what was dear to him. He was never introduced to Rkard, Neeva's son, to avoid jealousy."
There's your Mary Sue. Wow. The Top Ten Creative Writing
Litterateur just pulled a Mary Sue. He's like a freaking Dragon Goku with a pinch of Harry Potter.
"He walks forward carrying his dreams and hopes for a better future. He journeys for his destiny, his fate, and to answer what lies beyond the mystery of his scar. His quest to end the madness of his world starts."
Oh, does it now? Did you really have to say that his "quest to end the madness of his world" is starting? Man, no wonder you're writing papers for lazy college students: You have the imagination of a 98 year old triple stroke victim. Now burn that manuscript and get a job at Panera Bread, because your prospects in fiction are about as bright as my *******.
Final Thoughts on Assignment 3 - Do not buy $50 worth of creative writing for your Dungeons and Dragons character. If you do, you are a giant dumbass.
TL;DR- I am a giant dumbass.
Wow, i'm still doing these? Really, what IS wrong with me?
~Assignment 4~
-5/23/2011-
~Urgency: 5 days~
-Premium Quality-
~Three Pages~
-No VIP Support-
~$81~
Here I play the part of the overburdened college student, writing some essay that he just can't finish because of all the other coursework he has to do. So, we send an incomplete essay to the guys at bestessay to see if they can put the final touches to this unfinished essay.
Me:I already started writing the paper but I have a ton of stuff I need to do for finals so I need to finish up on the paper. I'm basically going for a "what if" scenario had Japan captured the Hawaiin Islands following Pearl Harbor during World War 2, if they would invade America, and if it would have an effect on the US Military intervention in the European theater, and the potential final outcome of the war. A fantasy scenario, if you will. Please begin at the asterix near the end of the essay.
Assignment was ordered May 18th, and was completed May 19th. That's fast!
Page 8:"When economy suffered the damages of Great Depression, attention of the US government was concentrated on reviving the economy."
Oh boy, here we go!
"Act of aggression on the Americans was condemned by the citizens, the Congress and the Senate who supported declaration of war against Japan. Unrestricted use of submarines came in handy to rescue American forces at a time when even her economic power was still on its knees."
That doesn't make sense. Those are two totally different thoughts.
"If Japanese succeeded in what they had planned to deal a killer to the Americans then US power and influence both politically and economically in the world arena would be greatly jeopardized. Japanese wanted raw materials for their industries and they had already conquered West Indies, Southwest Asia and China and wished to expand the territory (Aldrich, 2000, 222). "
This is seriously embarrassing. How does someone get a job as a professional writer when they write like that? Again, two different thoughts.
"With Americans having suffered enough during the Great Depression, the attack on Pearl Harbor triggered rage against the Japanese. The war in Europe was still ongoing but Americans remained neutral. This aggression by the Japanese tested the patience of the Americans who now vowed to protect the sovereignty rather than abandoning the government. If the Japanese plan succeeded, the people of US would have turned against the government decrying increasing hardships and they could have forced Franklin Roosevelt out of office the same way they had pushed out his predecessor Herbert Hoover."
Did this guy write an essay and then just scrambled it all up? We're going all over the place here. The thoughts are all there, but they are all out of order.
"After the attack of Pearl Harbor, all the focus of technological advancement was aimed at making an atomic bomb besides other military warfare."
So....not all, since you mentioned "other military warfare."
"After the Japan incursion on American Pearl Harbor the focus of WWII would have shifted to that front of the war. Hawaii held the highest number of US fleets and troops. The Japanese had little problem in identifying their target. The central aim Admiral Yamamoto Isoroku was to demoralize the Americans and turn the people against their government (Holwitt, 2008, 33). It was a surprise attack that was aimed at going further than destruction of the Pearl Harbor but it was the military rebound that saved the Americans from humiliation in the hands of Japanese."
Started going in the direction that I wanted you to go, about the hypothetical idea of Japan controlling the Hawaiin islands, but then you go back to a Pearl Harbor history lesson. This isn't an essay about Pearl Harbor.
"If the Japanese succeeded in capturing Hawaii Island then the shape of WWII would have definitely changed and may be could have altered the political dynamics as they are today."
That's the concluding paragraph.
Final Thoughts on Assignment 4- Bestessay writers are beginning to prove to me that they aren't very good at thinking outside of the box and not very good at imagination. I think we've established that you are more likely than not getting a bad writer with bestessays.
TL;DR-- I'm 6 dollars shy of spending $500 on a bunch of illiterate babble. I wonder what I could of bought with that $500...
