To be honest, if you carefully read the first essay, pheelyks is simply narrating not expounding/arguing. I don't know the exact question that yielded this essay, but i can tell that the essay is weak(reads like a cheap story to me) and is not cohesive.
HOW do you write 700 words without any single reference?
Where did this dude get these facts from?
This is what happens when students hire writers interested in their 'swelling' bank accounts. There is no doubt that the essay was written in a hurry, it reads like a boring story, it has no strong arguments, the dude paraphrased some online sources without even referencing the sources(the typical pheelyks'i don't care about my clients' attitude), and it reads like it was written by a 16 year old boy.
If i were to mark it, i'd give it 35%- which reflects the maximum capability of the author. Remember pheelyks might have been conned previously but he cannot paste such essays since, even to him, they are not of high quality.
The pasted works reflects pheelyks at his best...but as i have proved, the essays aren't worth a frog's croak.
The global economic meltdown that, according to many economists, we might be nearing the end of has led to many different suggestions as to how to restore and strengthen economic growth.
REFERENCE MY FRIEND, REFERENCE............
To a large degree, the economy of the United States and other developed countries has become dependent on their companies that deal directly, primarily, and perhaps even solely with technology.
Have become...........
Your knowledge about the tenets of capitalism is woefully irritating. Read about how capitalism operates before making unsubstantiated claims.
(Microsoft 1999).
You are writing about the role of technology in economic development. You could have done the essay a great favor BY using academic sources that actually talk about the economic development-technology axes, not using sources from a technological firm that will definitely over-hype the role that technology(read Microsoft's products) play in economic development. Typical academic rookie.
Further, it is generally a bad idea to use sources that are more than 10 years old. I am sure you are aware that technology is very dynamic and the prevailing technological/economic conditions of 1999 could not have remained stagnant for 10 years. Bulls.hit reasoning from you.
nd it has this effect since long before the beginning of recorded history.
What do you mean by this?
Or i am too silly to understand?
Sams, Brad. "The Economy and Technology." 25 January 2009. Accessed 2 June 2009. neowin.net/news/main/09/01/25/the-economy-and-technology
This is not how online sources are cited. Idiot. Is the source still online? You should have specified that.
The Role of Technology in Economic Development
Generally, when talking about the role of technology in economic development, you normally talk about:
a) the ideal relationship between technology and economy(NOT economic development)
b) How such a relationship works to the benefit of economic development
c) Give examples(and expound briefly) of how some economies have developed due to technology(good examples are from Asia). It'd also be good to back your examples with credible economic data such as GDP and prove how such commendable economic figures have been realized, in part, due to technology.
d) Quote credible academic sources, not Microsoft sources.
Pheelyks, seriously if you are ever scammed and the unpaid for essay talks about technology/economics/science, never paste it here because i will literally tear it into smithereens. Those areas are my domain.
Now, you and your sidekick(WB), can point out my grammatical mistakes. It is your domain.